Local Revision: Variety

This post made realize that I need to check my sentence variety throughout my paper. I feel that I did a good job of this in my draft, but there are always ways to improve a piece of writing.

1.    How much variation is there in your sentence structures in the current draft? Can you spot any repetitive or redundant sentence patterns in your writing? Provide a cogent analysis of what the Rules for Writers reading tells you about your sentences.

My QRG has flow to it. What I mean by that is it has varying sentence sizes, starts, and structures. The reader will not be reading the same thing again and again, they will be able to get refreshing sentence breaks throughout.

2.    What about paragraph structures, including transitions between different paragraphs (or, for video/audio projects, different sections of the project)? 

I believe that I do a good job of providing transitions in between my paragraphs as well as the sections in my QRG. I allow the reader to smoothly transition from start to finish and it makes it a more enjoyable read overall.

3. What about vocabulary? Is there variety and flavor in your use of vocabulary? What are the main strengths and weaknesses of the draft's approach to vocabulary?

I think that I use a decent amount of varying vocabulary in my draft but there are a few weak spots that could be strengthened even more. If I can clearly identify these areas and provide better vocabulary, then it will be a more hard-hitting QRG.

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